Dear mum!

Happy Mother's day! Thank you for accompanyingfor eleven years. You send us to school. You will take care of us. Once you make me happy, you make me sad and you make me angry. But you are the most beautiful in my heart. Wish you a happy Mother’s day! You accompany me in my life. I accompany to the old! I love you!

Your dearest son : Johnny

January.Fiveth.2016                               

    He Bei Tang Shan He Xiang Experimental Primary School 

                         Grade Four Class One

                              Zhang Zong Qin

修改后：
Dear mum,

  Happy Mother's Day! Thank you for taking care of me for eleven years. You take me to school every day. You cook for me every day. You care me every day. You make me happy every day. You are the most beautiful woman in my heart. Wish you a Happy Mother’s Day! You accompany me in my life. I will accompany you to the old! I love you!

Your dearest son,

Johnny

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

    四年级:张棕钦