Spring has always been warm, everything is new, full of vigor, the sun is shining, the weather is sunny, the spring breeze is blowing, the fragrance of flowers. And the spring of this year but ever is not the same, always rain not short, so this smell is not a flower, but wind blowing triple earthy fragrance taste. The whole world seems like After rain the sky looks blue., fresh and transparent, give a person a kind of comfortable feeling.
The spring of this year seems to be God deliberately arranged for me, every rain came so timely, wash the wound for me, rushed to the dust, let me feel the beauty of spring from the heart, the warmth of spring.In previous years, the spring to are as quickly and quietly, and this year is long overdue, earth shattering, a sound of thunder resounded through the skies, flashes of lightning split the clouds, as if spring to let everyone know, it exists.The arrival of spring, give me hope, let me renewed fighting, to face life, face in front of all; the arrival of spring, gave I feel new, let me breathe the breath of earth and air, let me feel everything is growing; the arrival of spring, gave me a fiery passion, let me see the courage to face the ups and downs of life in the way of life, step by step to rush forward; the arrival of spring, even if it is accompanied by thunder and lightning storms, give people a relief force, let me understand this world without them, the world matter how deep.Life just like the spring, which can have no wind and rain, which can not experience the vicissitudes of life? And what we need is fearless Storm Spirit, brave face, in the sad time, maybe it will get unexpected harvest. Moreover, the rain will you wash the wound, the wind will be for you to smooth out wrinkles.Embrace the spring, you will find that all around you will become more beautiful.

修改后：
In spring, the weather is getting warm, and everything is new, full of vigor. The sun is shining brightly, the spring breeze is blowing gently, and the flowers are blooming beautifully. In spring, it always rains. After the rain, we can smell the fresher air and see the blue sky. We all feel comfortable.
The spring of this year seems to be speical for me. Every rain comes so timely, washing the wound for me, rushing the dust, and making me feel the beauty of spring from the heart. In previous years, the spring is always coming quietly and lasts a short time. The arrival of spring, gives me hope, and lets me go on fighting. The arrival of spring, gives me a new start and lets me feel everything is growing. The arrival of spring, gives me a passion and lets me have the courage to face the ups and downs of life and rush forward step by step. The arrival of spring, gives me a relief force and lets me understand this world better. Life is just like the spring, and what we need is to be fearlessand brave in the sad time. Maybe we will get unexpected harvest.  Embrace the spring, we will find that all around us is becoming more beautiful. 

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

    四年级:张嘉成