my  mother   name  is  zhangyan  ,she's  thirty. my  mothre  love  vegetables  and  peanuts.she's  very  pretty.she's  tall  and  thin.she's  do  housework.she's  straight  hair  .  she  can  make  delicious  food.     this  is  mothre!

批改后：

  My mother's name is Zhang Yan. She's thirty. She's tall and thin, and she's got straight hair. She's very pretty. She loves vegetables and peanuts. She can cook delicious food. She's doing housework now!

  This is my mother!

批改老师：Andy老师

    四年级:李名扬