when  spring  comes,everything  is  green  .how  beautrful  the  spring  !the  breath  of  spring  ,embrace  spring!      in  spring.  the  grass  spit  the  bud ,  added  a  tracce  of  green for  spring.they  are  full  of  vitality,grow  in  the  arms  of  the  spring.thousands  of  the  birds  chattering  together  with  many  flowers,flowers  doo  --yan.  the  chlidren  playing  in  the  beautiful  scenery,  play  .  embraced  in  the  spring.the  river,rows  of  willow  yiyi  affectionate,blowing  in  the   wind,gently  swinging  songs,  waterfowl  gently  jimp  on  it  ,the water  shim  mering  corrugated  lines.    let's  embrace  the  incomprably  beautifui  spring!

修改后：
When  spring  comes, everything  turns  green. How  beautiful  the  spring is! In spring, trees begin to spit  the  bud,  adding  some green to  spring. They  are  full  of  vitality, growing  in  the  arms  of  the  spring. Thousands  of  birds are chattering  together. The wind is blowing gently. The  chlidren  are playing  in  the  beautiful  scenery. Let's  embrace  the beautifui  spring! 

修改老师：Crystal老师 

    四年级:李名扬